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Topic: Fallen
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Sat 10/04/08 04:50 PM
'The tears he once wept
Are now crystals of salt,
He leaves them behind
This time maybe his fault.'

This is a great stanza outside of the last line. It's too primary (in my opinion which in the big scheme of life really means nothing) which to me is in direct opposition of the rest of it. Out side of that, excellent. Really nice Fallen!:heart:

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Sat 10/04/08 08:10 PM

Fallen

Finally the vulture is fallen,
Lost in his flight,
Though faded his spirit,
He's losing his fight.

Tired of caring
For those letting him down.
He willed not to fly
And plunged to the ground.

The tears he once wept
Are now crystals of salt,
He leaves them behind
This time maybe his fault.

Better safe than be sorry
His inner voice rings
And into the darkness
He happily sings.

Out like a light
And gone like a flash
He's really not gone
Just faded in ash.

Fadedspirit 10/3/2008
Lost w/o reason, in any and every season.
Sometimes one feels that just living.
Can be felt like a nature of treason.


Great write man.drinker

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Sat 10/04/08 08:54 PM
Thank you very much AngelLight.

Thanks Havaman and your welcome.

Thanks MsWizard. :smile:

Thanks iam4u. drinker

LAMom's photo
Sat 10/04/08 08:56 PM

Thank you very much AngelLight.

Thanks Havaman and your welcome.

Thanks MsWizard. :smile:

Thanks iam4u. drinker


Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm Mom wants to know are you restinhappy :laughing:


Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh and yepppppppppppp the world knows your not feeling well

Fadedspirit's photo
Sat 10/04/08 09:09 PM
LOL LAMom....I slept my day away today and nobody once bothered me.

Thanks to my friends here in mingle world I'm feeling better. :smile: flowers

LAMom's photo
Sat 10/04/08 09:11 PM

LOL LAMom....I slept my day away today and nobody once bothered me.

Thanks to my friends here in mingle world I'm feeling better. :smile: flowers


flowers

Fadedspirit's photo
Sat 10/04/08 10:29 PM
There ya go again mom....makin me smile. happy

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Sat 10/04/08 10:31 PM
Wow, that was impressive.

Fadedspirit's photo
Sun 10/05/08 07:34 PM
Thanks Norwester and welcome to our little corner of the poetry world.drinker

ArtGurl's photo
Sun 10/05/08 08:22 PM
Nice!

Take care of you - get well soon!

flowerforyou

Fadedspirit's photo
Sun 10/05/08 08:40 PM
Thanks ArtGurl and if I don't get well soon, I'll be going nuts.....lol.

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Mon 10/06/08 01:18 PM
flowerforyou

Fadedspirit's photo
Mon 10/06/08 08:22 PM
Awww, thanks shauna. :smile: flowerforyou

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