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'The tears he once wept
Are now crystals of salt, He leaves them behind This time maybe his fault.' This is a great stanza outside of the last line. It's too primary (in my opinion which in the big scheme of life really means nothing) which to me is in direct opposition of the rest of it. Out side of that, excellent. Really nice Fallen! |
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Fallen Finally the vulture is fallen, Lost in his flight, Though faded his spirit, He's losing his fight. Tired of caring For those letting him down. He willed not to fly And plunged to the ground. The tears he once wept Are now crystals of salt, He leaves them behind This time maybe his fault. Better safe than be sorry His inner voice rings And into the darkness He happily sings. Out like a light And gone like a flash He's really not gone Just faded in ash. Fadedspirit 10/3/2008 Sometimes one feels that just living. Can be felt like a nature of treason. Great write man. |
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Thank you very much AngelLight.
Thanks Havaman and your welcome. Thanks MsWizard. Thanks iam4u. |
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Thank you very much AngelLight. Thanks Havaman and your welcome. Thanks MsWizard. Thanks iam4u. Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm Mom wants to know are you restin Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh and yepppppppppppp the world knows your not feeling well |
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LOL LAMom....I slept my day away today and nobody once bothered me.
Thanks to my friends here in mingle world I'm feeling better. |
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LOL LAMom....I slept my day away today and nobody once bothered me. Thanks to my friends here in mingle world I'm feeling better. |
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There ya go again mom....makin me smile.
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Wow, that was impressive.
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Thanks Norwester and welcome to our little corner of the poetry world.
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Nice!
Take care of you - get well soon! |
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Thanks ArtGurl and if I don't get well soon, I'll be going nuts.....lol.
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Awww, thanks shauna.
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