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Fadedspirit Joined Sun 12/23/07 Posts: 1681	Thu 08/28/08 02:52 AM
I don't have a title for this one yet, it's a work in progress. I thought I'd toss it out there to see what happens, since I've developed a block. Teardrops fall From a wretched, weeping soul As light steps away From a heart decayed and dim. Faint steps echo As death seeps on by, Leaving darkened shadow For his tears Have long run dry. Unkind words, Like a dagger makes the wound With salted disregard, Critics make their move. A bitter anger tasted Within this wretched soul, A darker form emerges As judgements take their toll. Echoes from the past Resound in darkened silence, While laughter is replaced By wishes Much too violent. Many wish to scoff At what they may behold And others lay their blame With what's refused to know. What right have we to judge Without due regard And spew our unkind words That may only bring more harm? The strongest hearts are careful To hear the silent words Like angels they attend The wounds that cause our hurts. Fadedspirit (work in progress)

pkd1220 Joined Thu 05/24/07 Posts: 8318	Thu 08/28/08 05:24 AM
full of emotion

s1owhand Joined Fri 05/18/07 Posts: 29437	Thu 08/28/08 05:44 AM
"i like it" - reminds me of the Dark Knight characters the Joker and Two-Face though...

flame1cutie Joined Thu 04/24/08 Posts: 7307	Thu 08/28/08 06:01 AM
That was great, full of feeling

Differentkindofwench Joined Sat 04/07/07 Posts: 5960	Thu 08/28/08 07:03 AM Edited by Differentkindofwench on Thu 08/28/08 07:26 AM
Blocked - mental blocks emotional blocks tears blocked and dried creating salt licks of the soul. Shamanic detective following dried tracks backwards. Rearranging blocks of belief to purposeful flow.

LAMom Joined Tue 12/12/06 Posts: 26866	Thu 08/28/08 09:05 PM
I don't have a title for this one yet, it's a work in progress. I thought I'd toss it out there to see what happens, since I've developed a block. Teardrops fall From a wretched, weeping soul As light steps away From a heart decayed and dim. Faint steps echo As death seeps on by, Leaving darkened shadow For his tears Have long run dry. Unkind words, Like a dagger makes the wound With salted disregard, Critics make their move. A bitter anger tasted Within this wretched soul, A darker form emerges As judgements take their toll. Echoes from the past Resound in darkened silence, While laughter is replaced By wishes Much too violent. Many wish to scoff At what they may behold And others lay their blame With what's refused to know. What right have we to judge Without due regard And spew our unkind words That may only bring more harm? The strongest hearts are careful To hear the silent words Like angels they attend The wounds that cause our hurts. Fadedspirit (work in progress) I see no blocks here,,, Just a humble soul

Fadedspirit Joined Sun 12/23/07 Posts: 1681	Thu 08/28/08 10:50 PM
Thanks pkd. Thanks s1owhand, glad you liked it. Thanks flame1cutie. Thanks DKW, I'm glad you like it. Awww, thanks LAMom. Maybe I'm trying to hard.

shauna22 Joined Wed 01/16/08 Posts: 228	Mon 09/01/08 01:23 PM


Unknow Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 1972	Mon 09/01/08 02:25 PM
all you need is a title

Fadedspirit Joined Sun 12/23/07 Posts: 1681	Mon 09/01/08 05:36 PM
Glad you liked it shauna. Hmm....but what to call it. Any ideas 1000111010123? Glad you liked it.

Unknow Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 1972	Tue 09/02/08 02:44 PM
Glad you liked it shauna. Hmm....but what to call it. Any ideas 1000111010123? Glad you liked it. that is best answered from your own soul