Topic: Why, why did you lie? | |
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(This poem isnt that good, and im sorry about that. I am just a little
depressed, and I had to let my feelings out. I wrote this in less than 4 minutes, so again its not one of my best works. I do hope you like it a little bit though. Again I am sorry if this poem kind of sucks.) I gave you my heart But you just tore it apart You ignored my cries Caused by your ferocious lies Why I cry Why did you not say goodbye? Why I cry Why did you make me Wish I'd just die? What did I do wrong To make you be gone? Did you ever love me? Love me like I loved thee? Why I scream? Is this just a dream? Is there more to be seen? Why are you haunting me? Did you not deem, Me good enough? Is that why You were so rough? Why you acted so tough? Did you ever care for me? If so, Then let me be free. Free from your memory... Why I cry Why did you not say goodbye? Why I cry Why did you make me Wish I'd just die? |
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OUCH. I AM MOVED BY THIS. THIS IS IN MY OPINION VERY MOVING.KEEP UP THE
GOOD WORK. |
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great job..it's from the heart that makes it special
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Thank you all for the very kind words.
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Good Eve.Stephy.First and foremost never question nor minimize your
poems or stories.(bad gurl)lol.We like to call this venting & releasing which is a completely healthy thing to do.I read alot of Poetry because well,I love it very much.I've seen many instances were are great Poets within exercise this option.Completely acceptable within.Trust Me!on this.This particular poem is powerful & saddening ,but it is critical to release these feelings.This peace and solace that you seek lies within Stephy,you and only you will be able to resolve this internal battle.Do not continually ponder over all the why's,for many of them may never be answered.The love and compassion that you sought in him was simply not there.You must now look ahead with your chin up and embark upon a new journey that will lead you to your true soul mate who will offer you what you need and desire.Just my opinion hon.Godspeed!Cybear. |
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Thank you. I plan to do just that. I just like to write because it takes
what I am feeling and its a way for me to just get rid of the bad feelings. It helps me to move on ya know? |
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Great job Steph, a good outlet for your feelings. Keep it up.
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Steph it is good to get all your emotions out. Whether it be in poem or
just talking to a friend. I too let my feelings out when I write. It makes me feel better afterwards and even better when someone says they like what I wrote. So keep it up if it helps. Good job! Angels |
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it was sad,but a very good start,and first post as a poet!!!
for a new bee... KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK STEF!!! I knew you had it in you to write... ya just gotta work on that intro...lol... no it didn't suck... |
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well i like this one it reminds me of one i wrote back in june called
where did u go |
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It is very heartfelt very good.
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