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Topic: the killl song
jimz Joined Sun 06/24/07 Posts: 2365	Fri 02/15/08 07:58 PM
shooot me back into the womb so I can start again shooot me when I smile for I am always being phony shooot the world many times over it takes many deaaths to finally be alive shooot the will of man if you can find it shooot god or up into the sky and the bullet will fall inside and if you shoot nothing you'll shoot yourself

1956deluxe Joined Thu 12/06/07 Posts: 8559	Fri 02/15/08 07:59 PM


bgeorge Joined Fri 09/14/07 Posts: 7850	Fri 02/15/08 08:00 PM
ouch

LAMom Joined Tue 12/12/06 Posts: 26866	Fri 02/15/08 08:00 PM
Living Life at times,, Well You know My friend,,,, Sometimes we are given that new beginning,, Its what we do with it that matters in the end... (((( Jimmy ))))

MsTeddyBear2u Joined Fri 04/06/07 Posts: 22031	Sat 02/16/08 03:56 PM
Very interesting! (((jimz)))

Kayla116 Joined Wed 05/23/07 Posts: 43	Sat 02/16/08 04:11 PM


dreamumbler Joined Sun 07/01/07 Posts: 7	Thu 02/21/08 08:33 PM
layered and evocative. i notice the date is right around when all those mass shootings were happening this month. scarey stuff out there, and i like how the poem reflects that. great lines: shoot me back into the womb & stanza 5. also by the end i'm getting the feel of addiction. that's what i mean by layers.

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