Topic: my poetry please comment
brokenwing212019's photo
Wed 01/02/08 08:47 PM
To all who read this the best way i can describe myself is through my poetry witch is below this is about my way of thinking and the way i belive it should be... If you read it please let me know what your opinon is on it... thank you...

hopefull
by: cameron beane
If you find someone or someone has found you what do we need to do to make it possible so that they can be together if you tell them how you feel and they feel the same I say again what dose it take to make them be together.. you feel as if you are between a rock and a hard place and cant make up your mind you know what you want but things still take time time is only hard if you dont make use of it but the pressure of waiting for that time is what takes its toll on oneself for it hurts to think of being happy takes time and yet we still use time to think,take things off our minds and also to dream of the future but yet still time is left... the world revovles around time and we live our lives by it but if we control time what would we do things go fast or slow always we see people rushing or being lazy so my question is what should we do?.......


faithfull
by: cameron beane
For the one who is not faithfull I will not remember, but for the one who is faithfull I will remember for that one person will be the one I keep closest to my heart...

faith
by: cameron beane
If all of man where to have there wish in life it would be a world of sorrow for the dreams of man would not exist anymore and we would all be the same.. with the greed that sorounds man we would take all of what matters most and think its nothing such as love, commitment,faith and respect for another... The world as we know it now is in trouble for we all have a path that we have lerned from either a family member or friend not to mention our sorroundings have the biggest efect on our behavior in life...Yet man hasnt lost yet we have those select few who have chosen to walk the line to being a person who hasnt lost his or her belife that Love,Commitment,Faith and Respect for another our the things that mold our future and mark our path to life and possibly happiness till we pass on....


I do hope that what you have read has put some perspective on the way you see life.. and that you might think of me if you want to meet a guy like this Send me a message!

Profession: restoration of antique motorcycles and bar back
Interests: poetry, dancing, curiseing on my motorcycle, lying under the stars on the beach, cooking

i_think_im_broken's photo
Wed 01/02/08 08:49 PM
sorry i don't comment on poetry.......


thats too personal and don't need my sarcastic jokes.

scotty1964's photo
Wed 01/02/08 08:51 PM
good stuff man real heavysmokin

ya ever read any jim carroll?

wanttachat's photo
Wed 01/02/08 08:54 PM
very deep flowerforyou

brokenwing212019's photo
Wed 01/02/08 08:54 PM
no i never read much poetry just that this is more of my views and thoughts on what ive been through and or what i wish i could have n life

brokenwing212019's photo
Wed 01/02/08 08:54 PM
no i never read much poetry just that this is more of my views and thoughts on what ive been through and or what i wish i could have n life

DevonNicole's photo
Wed 01/02/08 08:58 PM
Edited by DevonNicole on Wed 01/02/08 08:59 PM
Your last one is what struck me the most. Love, commitment, faith and respect are what we all need in life. Sadly, lots of us don't have parts or any of those. Very good, deep piece. I love reading poetry, but probably love writing it more. We should exchange some time :)

Sillypants's photo
Wed 01/02/08 09:01 PM
There will always be a poem
I will climb on top of it and come
In and out of time,
Cocking my head to the side slightly,
As I finish shaking, melting then
Into its body, its soft skin
--Jim Carroll, "Poem"

Dude-he wrote Basketball Diaries! :wink:

scotty1964's photo
Wed 01/02/08 09:04 PM
right on girl, i have all his albums too!