eddie flytt................eng 12
why not follow the beaten path it is an easier route to take many feet have worn a groove you can walk it in the dark
what is it you find so enjoyable in forcing your way through there do you not worry you might get lost what if you should stumble and fall who will find you
why not take the beaten path it will save you time we have leveled out all the hills there is no need to climb straight level many rest stations on the way

why is it you do not like our path come try it you will see this is the way it should be done come try it our way what do you mean go with you do you know how much work that is its a complete waste of time why would i go somewhere i've never been hardship and toil blood sweat and tears our forefathers did that for us come take advantage of their work and do things our way why are you so stubborn what do you hope to find why do you insist on going your own way heh

where are you going come back cant you see the sign dangerous no trespassing its for your own protection damn you you stubborn *** you're going to get us killed where the hell are we going there's no map for this place dammit these prickles hurt why must we climb over rocks hills and trees where are we going do you know the way why do you drag me here great a bog how wonderful full of bugs slime and things what now why are you stopping have you lost your way

oh my god look at that that's something i've never ever seen

As a poem i find the rhythm off and inconsistent rhyming. This was to have been a short story assignment. The base concept is ok, but ending lacks punch.
Please try to use some punctuation including periods. C- tks MZ HEINZ