WOW.... I could see each line as I read it.
Wonderful great job
The honesty and the perception is wonderful...

Thank you for sharing.. and yes, sadly, it makes sense..

"We were two unhappy people looking for
someone else to make us happy "

Very honest. Thank you.

Nice of you to share your thoughts to everyone here it does make sense.......it is a reality in most relationships....but why blame each other? Remember it takes two to tango...if the relationship failed , learn to accept reality as well as acknowledge your faults too. The people in our lives sometimes just come and go and others stay for good. If love failed, don't let bitterness, self pity and sadness ruin your life for there is always something better and wonderful things to hope for Appreciate the good things that you've experienced in those moments when you still have each other. You may feel unhappy for what happened but time heals all wounds....don't you worry, it's only temporary, it will pass learn to smile again , wait for the right one to come along....have faith and hope... Let love reign in your heart not hatred nor bitterness. Blame no one....move on with your life with a happy heart not sad

that was interesting ... nice write ...
and what is not to get... so many play those games...
and then want respect ...

wow! beautiful one.
just wish we could change all these and make it better

So this is your first write. I hope to read more. I think you have found your hidden talent. If nothing less I find it is a wonderful mode of expression and self therapy for ones self and all that read and relate. Well penned.

You say I don't speak.
I say you don't listen.

You say I'm easily hurt.
I say you easily laugh at my pain.

Yet instead of us moving on from each other
We will continue to play
the blame game.

fantastic!!
really fantastic writing the pain out in a poem..

all i can say is from a man's perspective,
somewhere in the lines i sense he still trusts you ..



when men trust their woman, they expect the partner to speak out if something is troubling them.
(now they are thinking, that's strange.., she looks upset..)

then they expect their partner to repeat it a second time
(now they are thinking, it's not a joke, she is really upset)

then they expect their partner to ask what do you think?
(now they are thinking, oh yeah, this is serious. i got to do something)

most men 'marry' because they 'trust' a woman;
because they 'trust' their woman to love them and cook for them, etc.
to them 'love' is a funny word; unless its by parents hugging their child. Proof?
most man are comfortable responding with 'i love you too'
unless it's a letter.

'crush', 'trust' are nouns a man understands.
Love? yeah, it's there in the Bible.



true,
that's the way guys generally are; with all people,
even themselves,
'hey man, wha's up', [thump]

but try laughing your pain in front of him
and he will 'prick up' his ears..
'hey girl, that hurt so bad?'

it's all in the tone,
they become stone deaf when they sense a complaint, a nag in them
(i think)

--xx--
although i have attempted to give the other side
i think it's truly a poem every guy should read

also, i have heard about some wise women
who say there are no good guys in marriage
all 'work in progress'.
thank you.

--xx--
i took the liberty of commenting not only because it talks of women when they get 'phosphorescent' sometimes; and men are obtuse to it

but also because fellow members expressed their 'wow'
- well worth taking your message one step further though may risk my repute

it's for SitkaRains and Jacksonne

and in response to Dolphin's comments.
really, she would be mad to throw out her guy.
just a different drift.

Thank you for your honest interpretation of my poem !

You say I win and leave.
I say it's a draw and let you go.
You say it's forever.
I say I don't mind.

my dame used to complain, 'i don't listen'
didn't quite understand it then.
your lines brought it all back.

i suppose your man got the chance to read your lines...?
must have tumbled.



all i see is
two very fine, gentle souls.

Oh I didn't write this to anyone in particular. It was just something that was on my mind. I have a very empathetic nature. :)