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Topic: Quote I made up
ZenSoul79 Joined Thu 01/15/15 Posts: 343	Thu 05/14/15 01:01 AM
If i said something that made your heart melt, could I keep the remainder in a glass jar with a rose to remind myself that my words can still have a powerful and lasting effect on people if used in the right way? -ZenSoul.

Pansytilly Joined Mon 06/09/14 Posts: 11310	Thu 05/14/15 01:38 AM
long time no see...how are you?

germanchoclate1981 Joined Wed 10/18/06 Posts: 1245	Thu 05/14/15 01:50 AM
It's a run-on sentence firstly. Secondly it's nonsensical. If something melts it just changes shape, its not like burning where part of the mass s converted into (thermal) energy (ashes being the remainder). On top of all that it sounds like something a stalker (or possibly a serial killer) would say. Then there is the misuse of quoting. You don't quote yourself, you quote others or others quote you. Quotes aren't made up, they borrow the words of others or recount past events.

simpltim Joined Mon 09/09/13 Posts: 127	Thu 05/14/15 11:06 AM
one i made up... hey adorable:) im sure u have a guy or a million chasing after ur affections, but i couldnt pass the chance and decided whats one more

Torgo70 Joined Fri 06/27/08 Posts: 27387	Thu 05/14/15 11:08 AM
It's a run-on sentence firstly. Secondly it's nonsensical. If something melts it just changes shape, its not like burning where part of the mass s converted into (thermal) energy (ashes being the remainder). On top of all that it sounds like something a stalker (or possibly a serial killer) would say. Then there is the misuse of quoting. You don't quote yourself, you quote others or others quote you. Quotes aren't made up, they borrow the words of others or recount past events. Buzzkill

2KidsMom Joined Tue 09/30/08 Posts: 58206	Thu 05/14/15 11:10 AM
If i said something that made your heart melt, could I keep the remainder in a glass jar with a rose to remind myself that my words can still have a powerful and lasting effect on people if used in the right way? -ZenSoul. Loved it!

2KidsMom Joined Tue 09/30/08 Posts: 58206	Thu 05/14/15 11:29 AM
It's a run-on sentence firstly. Secondly it's nonsensical. If something melts it just changes shape, its not like burning where part of the mass s converted into (thermal) energy (ashes being the remainder). On top of all that it sounds like something a stalker (or possibly a serial killer) would say. Then there is the misuse of quoting. You don't quote yourself, you quote others or others quote you. Quotes aren't made up, they borrow the words of others or recount past events.

ZenSoul79 Joined Thu 01/15/15 Posts: 343	Thu 05/14/15 10:25 PM
I agree. Major buzzkill....wait, my buzz is dead? Lemme check.....nope, still buzzin!

ZenSoul79 Joined Thu 01/15/15 Posts: 343	Thu 05/14/15 10:26 PM
I've had an amazingly perfect week! Wouldn't change a thing. Well, except for the grammar and punctuation nd literary nazis who kill my buzz. Heheh!

ZenSoul79 Joined Thu 01/15/15 Posts: 343	Thu 05/14/15 10:34 PM
Wow....you must be a hit at parties, dude!

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