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Through the haze
No clear ice Appeared a face Blue but nice Eyes were open Filled with fright Jaw hung low Her teeth were white Strains of hair Atop the plate Slight view Of her pate Hands held high Unthawed escape Around her neck Was tied some crepe Clothes flowed out As if in space Held in position Perfect place Peace has come Thanks to my push The ice thin As I kicked that tush |
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I like the "blue but nice" line. I would like to read another one including the girl beneath the ice,with a face blue but nice. The rest was not as good as that line.That line is class.Inspired you strange man. Her chuff was chewy,blue and tough,If only I could defrost her just enough,mmmmm he thought,heating lamps,a series of pulleys,lifts and ramps. Keep writing mate. I have read much of it but comment rarely. I have little to add but encouragement. I am not into necro,gerbils or cats,but I will play with any words.I am no word racist. Peace
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I like the "blue but nice" line. I would like to read another one including the girl beneath the ice,with a face blue but nice. The rest was not as good as that line.That line is class.Inspired you strange man. Her chuff was chewy,blue and tough,If only I could defrost her just enough,mmmmm he thought,heating lamps,a series of pulleys,lifts and ramps. Keep writing mate. I have read much of it but comment rarely. I have little to add but encouragement. I am not into necro,gerbils or cats,but I will play with any words.I am no word racist. Peace It would be nice to have a folder for poems unleashed and no holds barred for the disturbed. I would filled it with hundreds I have filed away. I found quickly you can only post 3 an hour here. My favorite I have ever written was for a fellow employee with a lazy eye. It would be removed if I were to post it here. |
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You nasty...
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Freedom of expression is never nasty.Ill humoured to those with a limited palate for the macabre perhaps,but my palate enjoys the variety.For variety is the spice of life when it comes to comedy.Loads of people take offence to lyrics. To them I say,listen to something you do like and piss off.I would rather cater to a small audience of libertines than an auditorium packed with sheep in human skin.Baaahhhh! I do think PT is just joking and playing at being revolted whilst chuckling at the wrongness.I like to think so anyway.Otherwise she wouldn't be drawn to your very enjoyable reads.More to read.See you and your words about mate.Always good.
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I never care what people say of my writes. I'm like you Brug it only inspires me but never encourages me to change.
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No one here wants to be your audience
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Edited by
Pansytilly
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Thu 01/15/15 02:12 AM
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Freedom of expression is never nasty.Ill humoured to those with a limited palate for the macabre perhaps,but my palate enjoys the variety.For variety is the spice of life when it comes to comedy.Loads of people take offence to lyrics. To them I say,listen to something you do like and piss off.I would rather cater to a small audience of libertines than an auditorium packed with sheep in human skin.Baaahhhh! I do think PT is just joking and playing at being revolted whilst chuckling at the wrongness.I like to think so anyway.Otherwise she wouldn't be drawn to your very enjoyable reads.More to read.See you and your words about mate.Always good. Ah! *gasp* .....I never! Haha...! You got my number, all right... |
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No one here wants to be your audience Not sure who you are trying to get at but I would stay away from stopteasings writes and my own for that matter if I were you.Find something you like instead.We cover all sorts of wrong.Try the auditorium instead,you should be in good company.Count sheep instead and sleep well.Unless you just want people to despise of course,please feel free to despise away.I find it amusing more than anything and it gives me wood for creative roasting.I obviously didn't use the right words to attract you.I am utterly gutted.Heartbroken. |
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