Topic: her dance
DaySinner's photo
Sat 12/08/12 09:55 PM
she closes her eyes
and dances an empty place
then a sprit touches
and accelerates her pace

she dances the dark
to music without words
with no one to see her
she utters not

but in her mind
she can see earth's garden
and countless birds that fly
as they glide in unison, as if one
in the air they dance their own
and she asks, why must I be alone?

a moment's pause!
she loses step!
but regains balance
then is on again

with talent and skill
and all that she finds
in the gift of her nature
she climbs to the skies

above the birds, such joy to behold!
now that she sees
from a height far above
the highest of all trees

her pace quickens but a wild wind forms
the clouds overhead are in angry form
some thunder, and some rain, to warn
the heavens shall not let you stay

in a flash she is home
with a tired stare
thinking about what
her effort is for

she grows faint and fades
and looks all around
with not a soul to see her
and folds on the ground

he cannot save her
he cannot touch
he can only watch
on the other side
of some reality

somewhere far, far away
two lovers never meet

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Sat 12/08/12 10:47 PM
it sounds so final...

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Sun 12/09/12 02:33 AM
Now that we have talked,:heart:Sinner:heart: I will offer this...

The way you have captured this girl, her journey, and the energy that compels her to fly high above her loneliness.. reaching out.. only to never embrace her lover, the one who nourishes the lover in her is intriguing.. I very much enjoyed looking deeper into this.. flowerforyou

DaySinner's photo
Sun 12/09/12 10:06 AM
Edited by DaySinner on Sun 12/09/12 10:13 AM
yes. She is a woman that can soar to the skies but she can't live in that happy state that she finds. The one thing that's missing in her life keeps pulling her back down.

also in the last lines i was trying to point out that although missed opportunities are common, they are still very sad.

Thank you Athena flowerforyou

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Sun 12/09/12 12:31 PM
What is it, Sinner, that's missing and pulling her down.. :heart: I like how cleverly you describe the way "he" envisions her experience while not being able to be there for her.. it is very sad.. i agree..flowerforyou

DaySinner's photo
Sun 12/09/12 04:10 PM
Thank you.:heart: She soars to emotional heights when you finds the beauty of nature, but then remembers she's alone. That's when she gets "pulled down" or expelled from heaven and wakes from her dream. frustrated

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Mon 12/10/12 01:44 AM
okay.. i understand.. thank you for clarifying.. i agree.. loneliness can be very depressing.. so it's a good thing she can escape through her imagination.. huh? love