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Topic: humanity calls
poppashroom Joined Tue 06/28/11 Posts: 425	Wed 08/08/12 08:25 AM
What is distance When we are one Ethnic exclusion Children of the Sun. Driven by games Olympian flood But why our best battles End with shed blood My heart is sad My head to hand falls Our unity as brothers Humanity calls.

tazzops Joined Sat 12/20/08 Posts: 33333	Wed 08/08/12 08:32 AM
Nice thank you for sharing.

poppashroom Joined Tue 06/28/11 Posts: 425	Wed 08/08/12 08:42 AM
Nice thank you for sharing. Thanks Tazz,

harsh2019 Joined Tue 06/05/12 Posts: 314	Wed 08/08/12 10:27 AM
the poem is really nice just a correction if you can make in 2nd stanza line 4 where it can be end shed with blood other than that the poem is really superb

poppashroom Joined Tue 06/28/11 Posts: 425	Wed 08/08/12 11:13 AM
the poem is really nice just a correction if you can make in 2nd stanza line 4 where it can be end shed with blood other than that the poem is really superb Thank you, but no, I wrote it that way, thank you for reading though

poppashroom Joined Tue 06/28/11 Posts: 425	Wed 08/08/12 11:15 AM
the poem is really nice just a correction if you can make in 2nd stanza line 4 where it can be end shed with blood other than that the poem is really superb Toying with tense,

Leigh2154 Joined Sun 10/02/11 Posts: 16479	Wed 08/08/12 11:20 AM
Lovely write Rich...Not toying with tense, rhyming

poppashroom Joined Tue 06/28/11 Posts: 425	Wed 08/08/12 11:47 AM
Lovely write Rich...Not toying with tense, rhyming Always grateful Vicki x

poppashroom Joined Tue 06/28/11 Posts: 425	Wed 08/08/12 11:47 AM
Lovely write Rich...Not toying with tense, rhyming Always grateful Vicki x

Ainjel Joined Sat 01/24/09 Posts: 3610	Wed 08/08/12 01:11 PM
Nice write Poppashroom.. Bring on Unity..

poppashroom Joined Tue 06/28/11 Posts: 425	Wed 08/08/12 01:35 PM
Nice write Poppashroom.. Bring on Unity.. Indeed, together

Up2Us Joined Sat 03/15/08 Posts: 3926	Wed 08/08/12 03:59 PM
Nice write....

poppashroom Joined Tue 06/28/11 Posts: 425	Wed 08/08/12 04:42 PM
Nice write.... Thanks up

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