this is a work in progress. I figure I'll post little by little as it develops and hopefully get some good feedback along the way. I hope you enjoy...

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The raindrops beat a steady tattoo on the windows, punctuated all too infrequently by the ringing of the brass bell above the door. The diner wasn't the most spacious of places, with seating for eight at the counter and five booths crammed far too close together for your average 200 plus pound Bostonian looking for a short order burger and fries here in the South End, and the downpour was a dull roar inside the narrow aluminum box. Delaney stood hunched over the polished metal counter and incessantly clicked the button of her pen, a habit she'd had since high school and one that never fails to piss off Tony... but if her boss could hear it from his spot next to the griddle he didn't let on this time. Instead he just snorted loudly and muttered something about the weather in New England. 'Yeah,' she thought 'if you don't like it, wait a day and it'll change.' This evening, however, it seems as though someone had forgotten to inform the past week's gray, wet days of their expected adherence to that small colloquialism. Her father had always been dismissive of the idea of Seasonal Depression, but whenever the winter months came to the city she started doubting his working class wisdom. There was never enough sun in this part of the world for her, and in her mind the Boston streets always seemed to be mired in wet newspapers or old gray snow banks. She knew that wasn't entirely fair… the summers were nice enough, they were just so fleeting. Arizona, now that's a place to spend your life. Rustic and quiet... warm and dry… Her daydream felt like an island in a sea of dank concrete.

Hey, this is actually nice. One thing I would like to suggest is to divide it into paragraphs for an easier read. Look at some novels and how they are group and/or divided, so you'll get the gist of what I'm saying.

Good luck and I'll definitely visit again. :)

Unfortunately a lot of the formatting was lost when I brought it over. I'll be sure to get that worked out when I post the next one

I enjoyed this. Looking to see the rest develop.