it was a dark and gloomy nite
where you have heard voices
from the beyond
your hair stands wild
and sceaming
with all your might
where the ecos
of the screams
have been heard
through out the city
of the unknown
looking out the window
as watching the sky
lights tend to flicker as the midnite moon
creatures cross the way have come
alive at a gravesite that was totally
unknown
i would have to say
freddy krueger was totally insight


ok
i changed the ending a bit

here it is

i would have to say
the ring from my grave
where i layed so peacful and
sound. the robber. got a total
spook of his so call life
as watching me walk away alive

i don't think the ending fits.

it seems as if you're rushing to the conclusion of your piece. allow it to take form.

just my interpretation.

thank you for your opion...

NO!! i was not rushing what i was writing... THANK YOU!!!!