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Satin shades hang in the way,
The view of the cliff seems to fade, The edging showing a shelf life age, 'Keep on keeping on' is what they say, I suppose that is one way of getting paid, Another way of tearing someone from the page, They can write this in an obituary that day, As long as the stick my grave in the shade, And leave me bundles of clove and sage, It's better to burn out than fade away. |
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nice..........................................
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ummm poeta!!!
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Thanks for the positive comments.
As always they are much appreciated.
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Cheers, kc!
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Beautiful poem Fear.
It's better to burn out than fade away. I like it
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'Keep on keeping on'
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dig the Neil Young reference. i like your talent. i think you could benefit from free-verse.
or i'm wrong and i liked it anyway. |
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Thanks for the compliments everyone, much appreciated as always.
@perfect - I actually used to write a ton of free-verse, I had somewhere around 100 or so of my writings on my harddrive but when my PC crashed I lost all of that work and more. I might get back to free-verse after a bit here, kind of playing around with flows and rhymes right now. |
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one of the best pieces, visually, that i've read by you. i have a tendency to edit everything that i read. that's the sarcastic sadist or something in me. interesting ideas in this piece i feel could have been expanded upon or ideas that could have been more decisively rendered. i only comment because i enjoy; otherwise i would leave you a smiley face, brother.
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Nice Fear...too bad about the loss. At least you can find the one's you posted on here and copy them. That's what I've done.
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