Topic: Prologue
writer_gurl's photo
Mon 01/18/10 12:07 PM
I am writing a novel and been so stressed about the prologue...It may not be the best but it is all I could think of...Let me know what you think


Laramie's Fortune....

it is a place of promise and grace. It is a magnificent sanctuary, a safe haven, even a refuge. Some would say the bright rooms are filled with harmony and sanctity. Joyful and enchanted memories dwell within the house that quietly sits on a hill overlooking the turbulant and raging sea.
Some might say it harbors dark reminisence within the walls. A haunting feeling washes over it, darkness succombs it. The bright windows and rooms are now dark and still. The laughing and joyful memories no longer seem to exist; only sharp painful silence fills the house now.
Laramie's Fortune was where I spent my life, watching it grow and build up, with pride. It is where I spent my days of joy as well as my tortuous nights. The house had become my legacy, as well as my masterpiece. This place is where I spent my existance and in this place is where I died....

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Mon 01/18/10 12:08 PM
I'd read it. Good start.flowerforyou

s1owhand's photo
Mon 01/18/10 12:10 PM
Excellent. Maybe a few tweaks but you have set the mood.
It draws one in...

flowerforyou

writer_gurl's photo
Mon 01/18/10 12:38 PM

Thanx so much

Ladylid2012's photo
Mon 01/18/10 12:48 PM
catchy...I like it :thumbsup:

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Mon 01/18/10 01:18 PM
I like it,i would make me want to read more.:smile:

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Mon 01/18/10 01:26 PM

I like it,i would make me want to read more.:smile:


It made me bring some books out that i have read before:
The Celestine Prophecy
Tenth Insight
By:James Redfield

jimz's photo
Mon 01/18/10 09:31 PM
timeless, yet present, deep, mysticalflowerforyou

writer_gurl's photo
Tue 01/19/10 08:27 AM


I like it,i would make me want to read more.:smile:


It made me bring some books out that i have read before:
The Celestine Prophecy
Tenth Insight
By:James Redfield

I should look those up