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I am writing a novel and been so stressed about the prologue...It may not be the best but it is all I could think of...Let me know what you think
Laramie's Fortune.... it is a place of promise and grace. It is a magnificent sanctuary, a safe haven, even a refuge. Some would say the bright rooms are filled with harmony and sanctity. Joyful and enchanted memories dwell within the house that quietly sits on a hill overlooking the turbulant and raging sea. Some might say it harbors dark reminisence within the walls. A haunting feeling washes over it, darkness succombs it. The bright windows and rooms are now dark and still. The laughing and joyful memories no longer seem to exist; only sharp painful silence fills the house now. Laramie's Fortune was where I spent my life, watching it grow and build up, with pride. It is where I spent my days of joy as well as my tortuous nights. The house had become my legacy, as well as my masterpiece. This place is where I spent my existance and in this place is where I died.... |
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I'd read it. Good start.
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Excellent. Maybe a few tweaks but you have set the mood.
It draws one in... |
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Thanx so much |
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catchy...I like it
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I like it,i would make me want to read more.
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I like it,i would make me want to read more. It made me bring some books out that i have read before: The Celestine Prophecy Tenth Insight By:James Redfield |
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timeless, yet present, deep, mystical
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I like it,i would make me want to read more. It made me bring some books out that i have read before: The Celestine Prophecy Tenth Insight By:James Redfield I should look those up |
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