I'll agree - it is a good start and it isn't like it is "lousy." However, I think the following items might help:

1) I agree with your profile picture ... to a point. It shows you looking bubbly and happy - very good. However, you have a friend in it, and to some it might give the perception that you aren't confident in yourself. Many guys skip over profile with multiple women in the profile picture since nine times out of ten the one that is of interest in the picture is not what the profile is about. Don't make them guess, because as a defensive mechanism you're not going to like the way we guess ...

2) Your profile has text speech. I understand - to many guys in your age demographic, it is no big deal. However, to others it just comes across like you think you are still in high school - not a flattering image. I'd clean up the grammar and punctuation, but that is just me.

I really wish for you the best.