Topic: This poem isn't that good. | |
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It's empty.
Like me. Lonely. Unkempt where my parents left me. With no message, a resentful assortment of wreckage. Acid hits split tormented neurons as if burns or scars could turn on a sweet girl under par. But she's still putting. But what's with the strutting? Pretending the never-ending pain of poverty is robbing me of the right of cutting? Oh, yeah, I'm nothing. Black hole soul. The sun is done. I'm on the run but jogging slow. Nowhere to go but forward. Backward is nothing but Xanax, panic attacks, track marks and a curse word. I guess I first heard on the line of a recliner. Or, fine, maybe in the line near the lone sign of this diner. I'll redefine her. Make her mine. Take the smell of hell and shame and claim it all and take my time. This isn't that good. Twists, good riddance to hoods. Who would keep our streets together... if the poor weren't born out of scorn and silent bed-wetters. No, this poem isn't that good. Roam through the hood. Good, I'm glad. I'm been sold and had by holders. And the day is over. Now I can sleep. And dream of crashing into cherries and burying my feet. Or red-heads dead syringes said soft-spoken, open coffin, still the sting is poking. Rings still open. Never clicking. Coming together was our trade. I made better sex with the weather. |
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nicely done...i mean, yeah, you are right its not that good
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Sad. Beautiful and sad.
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Your writing is always so full
Twists and turns and always An underlying hint of sadness or a madness if you will I loved it!!! |
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I'm continually impressed
by your level of thought in your poetry |
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extremely Lived, for one so Young..
The masterful interjections, passages from years past. to this present time here we live.. Nice, web working, wink... |
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Honest, really nothing more to say on this.
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Another awesome write.
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Love reading what you write...
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awesome again
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