right this took a lot of time to get done i had to be brutal and to the point. i was actually sweating when id finished typing so please be honest what do you think of this then

3 things turned me off right away while skimming it. The ions, punctuation and capitalization and you need to break it up with paragraphs. The parts I saw looked honest and heartfelt. Just polish it a bit and you'll do fine

I agree with Peccy, It will be great once U make the adjutments!!

much love Bridget I agree with the previous posters I also think most people expect someone they might be interested in to be clean I would like to see you add more pics and tell potential men who might be interested things you enjoy and future goals

I third that. Find the 'shift button', use some punctuation and watch spelling errors. At least with me, not that I'm perfect, but that stuff drives me NUTS!!!!!!!!

right how is that ?

right ive done it again lol this time using spell check

looks perfectly fine to me

I hardly ever look at profiles (cause I have a girlfriend) so I'm not much of a judge

but it looks better than most I've seen

ah that's sweet thanks for that i must admit my spelling was crap thank goodness for spell check.

i need to get a new usb cable for my phone i cant find the one i had but when i do there will be more yay :)

I personally liked the picture of you standing, in what I assume is your bedroom, in that little black top the best.

Drop a couple of carriage returns (enter button) between subject changes in your profile (i.e. between where you describe the man you are looking for and say where you say he must at least be able to be around children) Long blocks of text tend to be hard to read.

Loose the "lol" remarks and just say you have a good sense of humor and are looking for someone with the same.

Short of that, you're doing fine, now email yourself a couple of guys to get your feet wet and you'll be snatched up in no time!

Drop a couple of carriage returns (enter button) between subject changes in your profile (i.e. between where you describe the man you are looking for and say where you say he must at least be able to be around children) Long blocks of text tend to be hard to read.

that's a good suggestion

in writing always remember that white space is as important as text. It breaks up the points you make and makes it easier to hop from one subjetct to the next

thats exactly why I post the way I do with lots of white space between the lines

All I did was repeat what Peccy said in a different form. The credit should go to whom it belongs.