Topic: Im A Prime Example Of A Writer
thickumz22's photo
Sun 11/01/09 10:12 AM
Im A Prime Example Of A Writer
With A Primal Rage
Cause My Saliva Drowns Divers
In The Tidal Waves!
If This Industry Is A Village Im Doing Viking Raids,
Any Rappers Left In The Aftermath Will Survive As Slaves

Most Of You Artists Attempting To Paint It Vivid
But Before You Get The Second Coat Finished Make Sure The Primer Stays

Words Escape From My Tulips...Quick Find A Vase

Ya'll Figgas Dandelion...Im So Honest Abe

Haters Tryna Rain Dance On My Sunshine Parade
I Just Flip Em' The Bird Winter Furs When The Climate Change

This Foggy Worlds Only Viewable Through Designer Shades

Autograph It Sincerely Yours Then Sign The Page
Straightforward Facts I Wanna Tour The Map

But On A Plane Cause I Dont Wanna Hear That The Bus Caught A Flat

Was Introduced To Rap Later On In My Life Cause
I Was Listening To Jazz

With More Sax Than Warren Sapp

Im Like The John Elway Of This Anyway Cause

When My Love For Writing Poems Had Fell Astray

I Caught Her Back *Quarterback*

Im All That And A Bag Of Chips Yea I Brought A Snack

Cause This Is Food For Thought Youngin'...Who Ordered That?

A Submarine Sandwich Turns Into A Submarine In The Atlantic

When I Flow So Secure The Latch

I Take You Deep Into The Flow Where The Dolphins At

And Only Surface Up For Air When Im Off The Track

A Lot Of Thug Rappers Hard Like The Hoover Dam

But Look Close And See The Water Seeping

Through The Mortar Cracks

A Couple Years Im Predicting That Same Wall Collapse

While Im Still Standing In My Yankee Fitted Ball-Cap

Applaud That..The Art To Adapt I Taught Ya That
White Tee Dodgers Hat...Recon Roger That

These Females Coming A Dime A Dozen
So For Every Ugly Chick That Do Somethin

Freaky Youll Find A Dime Who Does It
Ima Star...I'ma Shine Its Nothin

Put All My Niggas On...Despite The Minor Budget

So Peace To The Haters Im Up On Cloud 9 Puffin

And Peace To That Sofa I No Longer Recline Much In

EkkoLost's photo
Sun 11/01/09 11:56 AM
Its ok not great as quite shallow
rap and hip-hop are to me meant to be meaningful and powerfuly explict mind numbing the reader?
not bad tho just kill the caps on every word as its hard to read with a flow cuz it looks messy! check out hounds of the devil?

MirrorMirror's photo
Sun 11/08/09 09:02 PM

Im A Prime Example Of A Writer
With A Primal Rage
Cause My Saliva Drowns Divers
In The Tidal Waves!
If This Industry Is A Village Im Doing Viking Raids,
Any Rappers Left In The Aftermath Will Survive As Slaves

Most Of You Artists Attempting To Paint It Vivid
But Before You Get The Second Coat Finished Make Sure The Primer Stays

Words Escape From My Tulips...Quick Find A Vase

Ya'll Figgas Dandelion...Im So Honest Abe

Haters Tryna Rain Dance On My Sunshine Parade
I Just Flip Em' The Bird Winter Furs When The Climate Change

This Foggy Worlds Only Viewable Through Designer Shades

Autograph It Sincerely Yours Then Sign The Page
Straightforward Facts I Wanna Tour The Map

But On A Plane Cause I Dont Wanna Hear That The Bus Caught A Flat

Was Introduced To Rap Later On In My Life Cause
I Was Listening To Jazz

With More Sax Than Warren Sapp

Im Like The John Elway Of This Anyway Cause

When My Love For Writing Poems Had Fell Astray

I Caught Her Back *Quarterback*

Im All That And A Bag Of Chips Yea I Brought A Snack

Cause This Is Food For Thought Youngin'...Who Ordered That?

A Submarine Sandwich Turns Into A Submarine In The Atlantic

When I Flow So Secure The Latch

I Take You Deep Into The Flow Where The Dolphins At

And Only Surface Up For Air When Im Off The Track

A Lot Of Thug Rappers Hard Like The Hoover Dam

But Look Close And See The Water Seeping

Through The Mortar Cracks

A Couple Years Im Predicting That Same Wall Collapse

While Im Still Standing In My Yankee Fitted Ball-Cap

Applaud That..The Art To Adapt I Taught Ya That
White Tee Dodgers Hat...Recon Roger That

These Females Coming A Dime A Dozen
So For Every Ugly Chick That Do Somethin

Freaky Youll Find A Dime Who Does It
Ima Star...I'ma Shine Its Nothin

Put All My Niggas On...Despite The Minor Budget

So Peace To The Haters Im Up On Cloud 9 Puffin

And Peace To That Sofa I No Longer Recline Much In
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