ode to the sun god
you wake shortly after you hit your highest peak
you sneak in and steal the sleep from wide awake souls
my soul is yours and i desire your sweet rest
amidst the busy work day, i find myself daydreaming of you
and you're so bad for me...

ode to the moon god
you wait until the clock strikes midnight
you slither in and awaken the deepest unspoken desires of my soul
my soul is yours and i desire your sweet comfort
amidst the silent night, i find myself longing for you
and you're so bad for me...

i'm new to these message boards... and i'd love to hear feedback

Very nice job overall. Unique! I love your clearly stated relationship with nature....not sure why you end with "you're so bad for me" (with the exception of perhaps the suns direct exposure to skin if that's what you're referencing there )

Welcome to this forum...look forward to more writes