Baby don't go
baby don't go
In these dreams
chasing you
running in slow,
motion
drinking you in
like potent love
potion,
tasting your lips
fantom tongue
riffs,
playing music
bliss
I miss this
first kiss,
butterfly goodnight
waking up
and you're not here
No
I'm not alright,
baby don't go
cold as snow
your my sun
you help me grow
woe,
is me
baby don't go
save me
from me
Mr.crazy
giving up on it all
so lazy,
you can't help me
though
I know
enable me
and I'll never let go,
just a little bit
please
I'm on my hands
and knees,
these
tears are real
baby I'm the real deal
whisper lovely nothings
nibbling on your ear-lobe,
holding my breath
so as to not
blow out your eardrum
you're gone
baby my chest is numb,
baby don't run
this game isn't fun
just come,
before this dream
is
is..
baby don't go



:Roberto Loera ©2009

I need some feedback on how I can improve this.
Don't worry about my feelings, I really want to make this one the best it can be, lay it on me.

I love this. It's like a stream of consciousness...the best kind of writing.

Mind if I take a whack at this one after work? I could have fun with it *grin*

I enjoyed it as it is, love the flow it drew me in