Topic: in need and more in depth
forsaken_knight's photo
Sat 11/22/08 03:23 AM
i have took the time to write a little about how i feel and what i am lookin for id love to hear all your responses i think im in need of some critizisum right now including on my english....

Applebutta's photo
Sat 11/22/08 03:57 AM

i have took the time to write a little about how i feel and what i am lookin for id love to hear all your responses i think im in need of some critizisum right now including on my english....


try to use more periods and commas. *criticism. Leave the on out between including and my