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Topic: im not good at writing poems, help write one 4 me
tyhodge's photo
Tue 11/04/08 11:15 AM
that sounds better than the original.smile2

lurchs_sister's photo
Wed 11/05/08 10:06 AM

im not good, but ill take a wack at it, what do i got to loose, lol

The one, my world
Jayla we play in
the morning, we
play before the
zzz's
A piece I always
missed, the piece
you made complete
The spot you filled,
the spot I left
blank for a beautiful
little girl like you.

Alot of memories
from your first 2
years.
Best of all having
you lay next to me in
the morning's to watch
your "Bob Bob"
Memories I'll cherish
Memories I'll never
forget
Your the one that
made me
Your the one that
keeps me modivated

Our times together
will never end
Rain or sun shine,
we'll play through
them all again and again
Just remember daddy
will always be yours'
and you will always
BE MINE!

how is that, i dont feel im that good at writing them, lol. fix anything that may sound out of place or need fixed to sound better. what you all think


Ty you can't go wrong with that!!
Your heart shines through and the love you feel for this beautiful little gift is felt by all!
She will love this!

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