Topic: People please read and rate my poem
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Sat 08/23/08 03:03 AM
Ok this poem was made in one day and i worked hard to make room for spiritual and fantasy inside my poem.


Love It's All That Matters

By Raiden
                                                                       
 
 Love It's hard to find it comes from Paradise.
Sometimes Cupid will come in a sign of surprise.
Your soul can come in a shape of a woman.(man)
Welcome her like it's your cause she was chosen
If you are lucky love will fall from the sky!
Don't ever give up!..don't ever be shy!
 
From the window of my universe
Your face haunts me like a curse.
You are so nice my eyes are fixating on you.
As  I look up I try to hide from you.
The day I see you..you keep me wake all night.
There will come a day when you will be on my side.
 
Suddenly I hear a noise.
From the sidewalk near my house I hear your voice.
Cupid laughs on the porch pointing at her.
And he says :Do you want me to introduce you to her?
I laugh so hard that I fell of the couch.
Cupid sees me fall and he says. Ouch?!
 
Cupid shot an arrow with his crossbow.
He missed the target and he hits her elbow.
The second arrow pierced her heart and soul.
The game will start:Prepare your heart and soul!
Soon Cupid leaves his work is done.
I look at the girl and I ask:What have I done?
 
The girl was sitting on the ground.
Cupid was nowhere to be found.
I grab my shoes and I go down to help her.
She doesn't gain consciousness whatever I do to her.
I bring her in the house and I put her on the bad.
I was so concerned I believed it was bad.
 
I cover her with a blanket and I check her forehead.
She was burning so hot that she hit me in the head.
I grab her hand and I tell her the story of my life.
She is so sick she tells me to bring her the knife.
I hug her and bring her close to me.
I feel a pain in my soul she took half of my energy.
 
My body suddenly feels so heavy ..I fall.
I even see green stars on the wall.
She was a stranger she didn't know where she was.
She soon started treating me like I was.
Close to each other we  woke up in the morning.
We look in each other's eyes our hearts are burning.
 
As  a gentleman I brake the eyes
And I started to tell her that she is so nice.
I told her the story of yesterday's fuss.
She was late so we walked to her house.
We reached the destination and she hugged me so deep.
A paper with her number in my back pocket she slipped.
 
She smiled to me and she walked to the door.
Her universe was pink I took a peak inside her.
We were so in loved we couldn't talk to each other.
We were such a beautiful couple you haven't seen other.
I went back to my home and I started dreaming so deep.
Cupid came back ... through the chimney he slipped.
 
 
The sweat Cupid was there smiling at me.
I was angry and I asked:Why did you  let her take my energy?
Cupid smiling grabbed my hand and started walking to the mirror.
I was so surprised...that mirror was actually a door.
Looking at me he said:Do you dare to enter?
Do you want to know the answer.
 
The mirror was shiny covered in light.
I didn't know to choose in my mind was a fight.
I decided to go..Cupid applauds my courageous intend.
As I enter all the energies of the world started to blend.
I was feeling bad I thought I would go.(die)
Cupid grabbed my hand tighter and tighter and said:Don't ever let go?!
 
Soon we reached the destination it was near a waterfall.
He went near an altar where he started  to bow.
This is  the place where love was first born.
This is where the first two souls had their newborn.
She needed some energy. A stranger came to the rescue. It was you.
She was weak in pain and helpless. That is what she did to you.
 
I took a peak on the altar's engravings when Cupid left receiving an order.
A motto was written:"Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder."
I didn't understand a word the motto said,the meaning was in vain.
I expected Cupid to coma and explain.
I looked up and I asked"What is this place?"
Near the altar I saw a Cross and a Necklace.
 
Cupid brought me back to my house.
I forgot to ask Cupid about the motto.
It is ok there is still one place I need to go to.
The girl was so beautiful as I entered the door.
An innocent sign burst she was checking her phone.
 
We got closed and we kissed..love to each other we promised.
Looking down from the roof Cupid was dismissed.
They were holding hands..they were so close.
They were smiling too much it was Cupid's dose.
When they flew to another world.
A universe where everything besides love is put on hold.
 
They met again they were a perfect match.
If you are wise love in your hands you can catch.
They sacrificed their lives for each other.
The love they had was so pure you haven't seen other.
 
Love It's hard to find it comes from Paradise.
Sometimes Cupid will come in a sign of surprise.
Your soul can come in a shape of a woman.
Welcome her like it's your cause she was chosen
If you are lucky love will fall from the sky!
Don't ever give up!..don't ever be shy!

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Sat 08/23/08 03:42 AM
Its a good poem and a very long one! A good love story!