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Topic: Uneven Surfaces
myanimalcracker Joined Wed 02/27/08 Posts: 900	Wed 07/23/08 10:15 AM
Can’t shake the sense that something is enveloping my body and trying to penetrate at every breaking point. Its voices are trumpets together they put out the light, tuck me in, raise a rubber knife to my chin. So I riot when wriggle: twist your tongue into my body, divide and discount me: Cracking my jaw into tiny and solitary pieces and I’ve got this claw scattering my brain into tough pieces.

lastmanstanding602 Joined Tue 12/11/07 Posts: 1979	Wed 07/23/08 10:17 AM
?

Audie Joined Thu 07/17/08 Posts: 1898	Wed 07/23/08 10:17 AM
That's messed up

1956deluxe Joined Thu 12/06/07 Posts: 8559	Wed 07/23/08 10:18 AM
The tongue part was good.

myanimalcracker Joined Wed 02/27/08 Posts: 900	Wed 07/23/08 10:18 AM
That's messed up I'm glad you could formulate such an intelligent opinion.

RKISIT Joined Tue 01/08/08 Posts: 16721	Wed 07/23/08 10:19 AM
cool daddy-o, alls you need is some smooth bongos playing in the back ground can you dig.

d4tc Joined Tue 04/15/08 Posts: 2754	Wed 07/23/08 10:21 AM
Amazing Write! I really like this one.

alexiscap419 Joined Wed 01/09/08 Posts: 76	Wed 07/23/08 10:21 AM


jfjfw Joined Wed 07/16/08 Posts: 71	Wed 07/23/08 10:29 AM
Let's play with the rubber knife, shall we? (Keep it up. Twisted is ok)

BobbyJ Joined Fri 02/22/08 Posts: 1368	Wed 07/23/08 10:31 AM
It seems an expression of how someone is a affecting you. I'm suspecting that you may be writing of the effect felt when one is falling in love. Fascinating imagery!

SKPCG Joined Mon 03/03/08 Posts: 14708	Wed 07/23/08 10:32 AM
I don't know what's more twisted. This writing or the fact that I understand it....

myanimalcracker Joined Wed 02/27/08 Posts: 900	Wed 07/23/08 10:33 AM
It seems an expression of how someone is a affecting you. I'm suspecting that you may be writing of the effect felt when one is falling in love. Fascinating imagery! The fact that you understood gives me hope for the rest of 'em. Thank you!

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