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Topic: Red-Blooded
myanimalcracker Joined Wed 02/27/08 Posts: 900	Tue 07/22/08 10:55 PM
breath’s bedrock; compulsory to consciousness, irreplaceable. needed beyond organic thought; he is necessary. his pivot pierces all placement prompting sweetest dreams, to leave me panting. he is permanence persisting, paramount in the core of me my love is potent not predisposed to fracture; and prerequisite to any future. as he holds my pulse, never have i felt more red-blooded.

Audie Joined Thu 07/17/08 Posts: 1898	Tue 07/22/08 10:57 PM
Hmmm, nice poem!

1956deluxe Joined Thu 12/06/07 Posts: 8559	Tue 07/22/08 10:57 PM
Potent

The1WhoLuvsU Joined Sun 07/20/08 Posts: 270	Tue 07/22/08 10:59 PM
touching

myanimalcracker Joined Wed 02/27/08 Posts: 900	Tue 07/22/08 11:43 PM
Thank you (((Audie, 1956, The1)))

Wolfeyes58 Joined Tue 09/25/07 Posts: 5114	Tue 07/22/08 11:46 PM
Very nicely done. You have a way of expressing that deepness.

PoeticMaster Joined Fri 07/18/08 Posts: 411	Wed 07/23/08 03:04 AM
nice use of poetic device in particular alteration

isaac_dede Joined Sat 11/24/07 Posts: 10632	Wed 07/23/08 03:20 AM
Loved the flow. Very well done

s1owhand Joined Fri 05/18/07 Posts: 29437	Wed 07/23/08 04:16 AM
warm oxygen rich flow infused with life and energy beat in nourishing pulses through my head into my core to fingertips and to our lips and every tingling electrified anticipation

myanimalcracker Joined Wed 02/27/08 Posts: 900	Wed 07/23/08 09:51 AM
(((Wolf, Poetic, isaac, s1ow))) Thank you for your responses

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