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Ok people, tell me what you think. Had a bad day today & on days like this I write....
I saw the sky turn red tonight Amidst the darkening clouds As the rain began to fall The drops all cried out loud I saw a puddle made of tears As if they came from me A stream of endless breaking hearts All leading out to sea I saw the tree sway with the wind And reach out branches long Resembling arms yearning for Her lover, safe and strong I felt the wind blow through me It left an empty space Where once my heart resided Gone…without a trace |
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Its very good with the right music that could be a good song
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When ive had a bad day i just hit the bottle
 .....but the poem is good.
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nice write
welcome to this side of the site
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Good write and yes it could be song lyrics!
And heres a (((Hug))) for that bad day you had. |
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When ive had a bad day i just hit the bottle .....but the poem is good. |
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Thanks all...
...for the hug ...got a bottle? I'll drink it! ...for the welcome ...and for the kudos |
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Wow, I felt that one. Powerful images...
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nicely put!!!
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Ok people, tell me what you think. Had a bad day today & on days like this I write.... I saw the sky turn red tonight Amidst the darkening clouds As the rain began to fall The drops all cried out loud I saw a puddle made of tears As if they came from me A stream of endless breaking hearts All leading out to sea I saw the tree sway with the wind And reach out branches long Resembling arms yearning for Her lover, safe and strong I felt the wind blow through me It left an empty space Where once my heart resided Gone…without a trace love it! |
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Deep, human, intense.... |
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very touching and very descriptive too. That was beautifully written.
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