Sometimes things can see your fate
bring you down to sorrows hate
but do not let your love be pain
do not reveal that you are sane
you dont owe them anything
you cant make them see these things.

If they understood these thoughts
you would be what they are not
child you are what I would be
If I saw things the way you see
Live the life that I would live
Give the trugh that I would give
Do not let them take away
the life I had up until this day

nice angel

Again honey, word choice is a problem here. It's too predictable. Use a thesaurus and come up with unique words to describe your actions, though not so unique that it loses its meaning. Other than that, good write.

"but do not let your love be pain"

that is a beautiful line. ty.

thank you

I enjoyed this write very much.
Thank you Angelface.

I actually wrote something with the same title in April!
Kinda cool


There was no way to tell if it would be bad or good.
Living my life, a young fireball burning down the neighborhood.
Answer to the streets as the judgments rang true.
I’m doing my own thing; old folks say it’s nothing new.
They rarely if ever give credit when it’s due.
Let youth be the reason for the lack of positive revenue.
It seems jobs are non-existent even if you have the qualifications.
All adds up to malignant anguish and bitter mental frustration.
Blame placed when the answer isn’t quite sanctioned.
I question the improper authorities controlling this nation.
And these thoughts on the situation may not be yours.
But if the next phase were better I’d love to take the grand tour.
No time for rest got to go out and hustle all day, but no pity.
Every dime I earn I feel blessed, my daughter likes truffles and they cost a pretty penny.

thought it was abount the fell
not the words that it reveals ...
I like it

nice write